Personalized exam preparation …

# 雅思大作文6.5分批改报告（真题：远程办公利弊）

📝 批改示例作文段落（虚构典型考生答案）

> *"Nowadays, more and more people work from home. I think it has many advantages and disadvantages. First, it can save time because workers don't need to commute. Second, employees can look after their children. However, working at home make people feel lonely and it is difficult to communicate with colleagues. In conclusion, I believe remote working is good but also has bad points."*

❌ 语法问题清单

| 原文错误 | 修正 | 问题类型 |

|---|---|---|

| working at home make people | makes | 主谓一致（第三人称单数） |

| more and more people | an increasing number of people | 词汇重复、俗套 |

| good but also has bad points | has both merits and drawbacks | 口语化、词汇单一 |

| it is difficult to communicate | it becomes challenging to collaborate | 缺少逻辑连接精确性 |

🔍 逻辑问题（影响TR与CC分数）

1. 观点不明确："good but also has bad points" 属于骑墙式结论，6.5分需要清晰立场（如：利大于弊，前提是…）。

2. 论证无展开："save time" 后缺少解释链条（时间→效率提升/生活质量→企业受益）。

3. 例证缺失：全文无具体案例，TR无法上6.5。

✨ 6.5分升级示范句

> *"For instance, a 2022 survey by Stanford University found that remote employees saved an average of 72 minutes daily on commuting, which they redirected toward skill development and family care—boosting overall productivity by 13%."*

🎯 考前提分行动建议

1. 固定结构：4段式（引入+立场 → 利2条 → 弊1条+让步 → 结论重申立场）。

2. 每段公式：观点句 + 解释 + 具体例子（数据/企业名/群体）。

3. 替换高频词：advantage→benefit/merit；disadvantage→drawback/downside。

4. 限时训练：考前每天40分钟写一篇，重点检查第三人称单数和冠词。

坚持按此标准练3篇，TR和CC稳定上6.5完全可行。加油！